Story Review: Under His Watch (16th Century Valois-Orléans-Angoulême Romance)

yeah I am writing another review... 'cuz I have nothing else to do (well I suppose I can organise my room more than what I have done so far.. but com'on who wants to do that!).. so I am just gonna pass time until 5 when the floor meeting is...

oyeah... I am at ANU in Canberra atm.... first day... mom = fuss.... 'nough said =3

forward to the review!

Title

I am assuming 'Valois-Orléans-Angoulême' is French (cuz the story was set in France)... but I don't speak the language... I am not even sure what it means.. or whether it's a place or an era or whatever.... so yeah.. just pointless ramble...

well imo.... the stuff inside the brackets isn't needed in the title... coulda been put in the blurb instead.. but well doesn't really matter.. no biggie =3

I like the title 'Under His Watch'.. I think it sets the tone for the story... you know the sexism stuff... 'cuz it is historical.... so yeah I like it =3 

Grammar/spelling/punctuation/all-those-English-things

I am not too sure whether it's this story or another... I am pretty sure it's not this story.... well I am not too sure but one of the stories I read these past few days had well... a lot of missing words or words that were out of order and the like ^^" made it hard to read...

I am pretty sure it wasn't this story.. but again I am not too sure... so just a warning in case I am wrong and it is this story.....

Plot/Characterisation/General Comment/What-not-and-stuff/SPOILER(probs)

First thing first: I love how the sexism and racism is actually expressed in this story. Like it is actually expressed and it is actually used as a 'problem' (shit my tired mind can't remember my vocab) which I like. 

There are other historical fics that mention the sexism/racism stuff.. but it's kinda like: "oh yeah that was a problem... let's mention it..." but they are just not really expressed well and isn't actually incorporated into the character's personalities and mindset.... 

so yeah I like the overall plotline (although it really just focuses on romance.. so yeah ^^")

So yeah a problem I have with this fic is the fact that I feel like I got whiplashed quite a few times.... ^^" so what I mean by that is the flow of something of the things is a bit abrupt... so imo some of the changes in the character's mindset and stuff happened kinda outta nowhere.... like it just kinda like there wasn't a good enough reason or event that triggered the change.... I don't know how to describe it (esp. since I am kinda falling asleep on my keyboard)... 

but yeah the characterisation is not bad.... but like I said in the paragraph above.. that was a issue for me....

End Note

I am really sleepy... I am sorry if nothing makes sense.... and it is probs not as thorough as it shoulda been but I just can't conjure anything up in my tired state of existence......

♥W=3ndu